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托?？谡Z題目：
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? 18-year-old adults are not mature enough to vote.
托?？谡Z參考范文：
In my opinion, 18-year-old people already have the ability to vote. Firstly, because I think when we are 18, we are adults, which means we can take responsibility for our behaviors and actions. (At the age of 18, we begin to make decisions independently, and thus our votes can represent our own opinions)【括號內(nèi)的也可以不說】 And also I think young people above 18 are very concerned about the future of the country and they have the ability to reason and also enough knowledge about politics, which will help them to make right decisions. 補(bǔ)充例子：For example, my friends and I are just 18 years old, and we often surf online to learn about the information related to national policies. And our politics teachers always tell us not to just repeat what others say but think by ourselves. So we are mature enough to vote.
托?？谡Z參考答案：
Well, I don't think I can agree with statement because I think people who are already 18 years old are mature enough to vote.【也可以直接說： In my opinion, 18-year-old people already have the ability to vote.】
Firstly, because I think when we are 18, we are adults, which means we can take responsibility for the our behaviors and actions. (At the age of 18, we begin to make decisions independently, and thus our votes can represent our own opinions)【補(bǔ)充了一些細(xì)節(jié)，否則，這第一個(gè)理由根本就沒有論證，丟下一句：我18，我成年了，就走了……哎~不要這么傲嬌嘛!至少稍微結(jié)合咱們的話題解釋一句嘛!】
And also I think young people above 18 are very concerned about the future of the country and they have the ability to reason and also enough knowledge about politics, which will help them to make right decisions.
補(bǔ)充例子(可以跟著Pt的答案一路說到結(jié)尾)：For example, my friends and I are just 18 years old, and we often surf online to learn about hte information related to national policies. And our politics teachers always tell me, "Please don't just repeat what others say but think by yourself, think critically." So I am pretty sure that we are mature enough to vote. (/ 語速快的同學(xué)，可以挑戰(zhàn)加長版結(jié)尾So I am pretty sure that we have the capability to decide what is good for the nation and the people and thus we definitely are old enough to vote. )
這純粹為了湊時(shí)間的結(jié)尾，可以不讀了：So I think they have both the right and capability to decide what is good for the nations and what is good for the people. So that's why I think they are old enough and mature enough to vote.【很啰嗦，其實(shí)就是因?yàn)闆]有內(nèi)容了，所以用漫長的結(jié)尾來拖時(shí)間】
托?？谡Z模板分析：
本文來自亦鷗高分網(wǎng)友shurui，非常贊的發(fā)音!這一次之所以沒有選擇晨讀團(tuán)同學(xué)的錄音，并不是因?yàn)榇蠹业拇鸢浮緝?nèi)容】不夠好，而是因?yàn)椋捍蠹业摹景l(fā)音】錯(cuò)誤真的太多了!
shurui同學(xué)是亦鷗有名的淡定大神，不論什么內(nèi)容，她都說得從容不迫。這一題的答案雖然：很空洞，但因?yàn)榘l(fā)音非常標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，整體的表達(dá)十分流利，第一遍聽依然覺得真的很棒!每一次在收聽大量晨讀團(tuán)同學(xué)的錄音時(shí)，Pt都感到，有一件事不得不承認(rèn)：發(fā)音好真的太重要!1)發(fā)音不標(biāo)準(zhǔn)的，根本聽不懂啊!2)發(fā)音有口音的，聽著很難受啊!3)發(fā)音特別好的，心里就覺得ta答得好啊!所以，強(qiáng)烈建議大家，正音，從今天開始!
這里就不得不再一次強(qiáng)調(diào)：我們要做的是【跟讀】。除了學(xué)內(nèi)容之外，還要學(xué)答題者的發(fā)音，要去模仿，去跟著讀。請大家不要僅是查看推送的內(nèi)容，然后就開始自己讀了——那你的發(fā)音錯(cuò)誤永遠(yuǎn)也改不了哇!一定要點(diǎn)擊閱讀原文，收聽高分回答，并收聽Pt在晨讀團(tuán)里的語音示范，每天堅(jiān)持再堅(jiān)持，就一定能跟發(fā)音錯(cuò)誤說88!
在此，說一下本題的幾個(gè)常見錯(cuò)誤發(fā)音：
adult 這個(gè)音已經(jīng)被大家念出花兒來了，Pt聽到最奇葩的發(fā)音是：“矮倒他”……這都什么鬼???請注意：這個(gè)音是/??d?lt/ 或者 /?'d?lt/ (注意，a這個(gè)原因發(fā)音不同的時(shí)候，重音也不一樣哦!shuirui讀的就是/??d?lt/ )不要跟我說你的“矮倒他”是英音!英音里的a也不會(huì)發(fā)成“矮”噠!
mature 這個(gè)音，也是各種不同版本，聽得Pt都快懷疑人生了。有人讀“嗎t(yī)ure”有人讀“馬ture” 還有人連ture都不對，讀成了“嗎t(yī)er”。那真是。。。誰能聽出來你在說“成熟”啊!我還以為想說master然后吞了s呢!請注意：這個(gè)音是/m?'t???r/ 前面不是/ma/是/m?/ 哦!
vote 請大家注意哦!v在發(fā)音的時(shí)候，要用上牙輕輕咬一下下唇~不要出現(xiàn)漏風(fēng)的效果!
接下來，Pt來解釋一下我的修改：
1. 【不能拿18 years old當(dāng)“18歲的人”來講】I think people who are already 18 years old are mature enough to vot
18歲的人，正確的說法如下：
A. 18-year-old people 【作定語，通常都是這樣，加了連字符，就成了形容詞啦!比如：在校的活動(dòng) on-campus activities】
B. people who are 18 【作表語】
C. people who are 18 years old 【作表語】
2. 【18歲，我們能夠?qū)Α拔覀兊摹毙袨樨?fù)責(zé) behavior是不可數(shù)名詞】we can take responsibility for the our behaviors and actions
3.【一個(gè)發(fā)音錯(cuò)誤】 I think young people above 18 are very concerned about the future of the country 這里的concerned，被shurui發(fā)成了concered，中間那個(gè)n被吞了!這是我們大家也經(jīng)常犯的錯(cuò)誤。建議再練習(xí)一下environment和government，也是要注意：不要吞n! (加入晨讀團(tuán)，收聽Pt的語音示范~)
4. 【沒有細(xì)節(jié)】節(jié)選一下優(yōu)秀錄音下方的網(wǎng)友點(diǎn)評(是的，亦鷗的網(wǎng)友們就是這么犀利!這才能進(jìn)步呀!不痛不癢、你好我好大家好的點(diǎn)評，有啥用?!)
- 我覺得你沒給出充足理由解釋 為什么mature到可以vote。其他方面都o(jì)k。
shuirui的回應(yīng)：
- 首先感謝你的點(diǎn)評.因?yàn)?)成年人了,可以為行為負(fù)責(zé) 2)具有獨(dú)立思考的能力 3)具有相關(guān)的知識(shí) 2 3)可以做出正確的判斷.
圍觀群眾表示：
- 語言考試不太關(guān)注內(nèi)容，能夠順下來就很不錯(cuò)了。如果內(nèi)容要改進(jìn)，最好有一個(gè)具體事例。
shuirui的回應(yīng)：
- 我也覺得有具體例子更好,可是想半天沒想出來呀...
在此，Pt給出回應(yīng)：
1. 語言考試并不是完全不看內(nèi)容哦~ 但就像我在前面講到的：【語音確實(shí)加分!】不過，【內(nèi)容也不容忽視!】
2. 增加細(xì)節(jié)和例子并不難，Pt已經(jīng)示范啦~
A. details 是把你說的事情具體化，如： we can take responsibility for the our behaviors and actions.我們能對自己的行為負(fù)責(zé)，具體化后： At the age of 18, we begin to make decisions independently, and thus our votes can represent our own opinions.我們自己獨(dú)立做決策，因此我們的選票能夠代表自己的意見。
B. exemplification 是把你說的事情搞成一個(gè)具體的事件，如： young people above 18 are very concerned about the future of the country. 年輕人關(guān)心國家的未來。具體到一個(gè)例子：For example, my friends and I are just 18 years old, and we often surf online to learn about the information related to national policies. 我和我的小伙伴，我們就成天看新聞。
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