如何做好雅思寫作中的連貫

雅思寫作的連貫以及銜接(Coherence and Cohesion)具體在寫作過程中考生需要注意包括兩大部分：段落之間的連貫(Coherence)和每段內(nèi)部句群之間的銜接(Cohesion)，在雅思四項評分標準中屬于比較容易突破的一項，也是寫作考官在評卷過程中比較容易給高分的一項。

第1類錯誤：連接詞過于生硬或者過多

• 錯誤分析

有了一定寫作基礎(chǔ)的考生，往往忽略連貫的多樣性，使得一篇作文的連接詞變得異常死板和僵硬，靈活的連接詞在一篇7分作文中是十分有必要的。

• 例子

首段連接詞死板：

學(xué)生版1：

Firstly, the users can send E-mails to our friends in other countries in a few minutes while sending a traditional letter takes people at least a week and costs much. Secondly, users can make friends with people from all parts of the world. It overcomes the geographical barriers and makes the world smaller. Thirdly, the Internet accelerates the flow of information and spreads education to all corners of the globe. We can have easy and quick access to the latest information worldwide.

修改版1：

The users can send E-mails to our friends in other countries in a few minutes while sending a traditional letter takes people at least a week and costs much. These Users can also make friends with people from all parts of the world. It overcomes the geographical barriers and makes the world smaller. Another point, the Internet accelerates the flow of information and spreads education to all corners of the globe. We can have easy and quick access to the latest information worldwide. 

注：7分段的連接詞不宜使用的過多（整篇文章控制在6-7個較明顯的連接詞即可）和過于明顯

第2類錯誤：主題段落缺少中心句

• 錯誤分析

當一個段落中包含著2-3個小觀點（好處／壞處／原因／解決方案）時，一定要在每個段首寫出一句概括性的中心句。

• 例子

學(xué)生版：

The users can send E-mails to our friends in other countries in a few minutes while sending a traditional letter takes people at least a week and costs much. These Users can also make friends with people from all parts of the world. It overcomes the geographical barriers and makes the world smaller. Another point, the Internet accelerates the flow of information and spreads education to all corners of the globe. We can have easy and quick access to the latest information worldwide.

修改版1：

The application of E-mails has brought us three aspects of advantages. The users can send E-mails to our friends in other countries in a few minutes while sending a traditional letter takes people at least a week and costs much. These users can also make friends with people from all parts of the world. It overcomes the geographical barriers and makes the world smaller. Another merit, the Internet accelerates the flow of information and spreads education to all corners of the globe. We can have easy and quick access to the latest information worldwide.

但是當每段只有1個小觀點時，那么觀點句本身就是中心句了，不需要額外再寫中心句了。

修改版2：

Although there clearly are some demerits, I strongly believe the application of E-mails has brought us much more advantages. The users can send E-mails to our friends in other countries in a few minutes while sending a traditional letter takes people at least a week and costs much. These users can also make friends with people from all parts of the world. It overcomes the geographical barriers and makes the world smaller. Another merit, the Internet accelerates the flow of information and spreads education to all corners of the globe. We can have easy and quick access to the latest information worldwide.

（這個版本涉及到承上啟下的段落過度方法，請考生認真研究）

第3類錯誤：指代錯誤或者不清晰

- 錯誤分析: 每個段落內(nèi)部代詞（this/that/these/those/such/which/it/they/them）的使用是很多考生忽略的考點。大部分考生把注意力放在名詞的同義替換上，造成詞匯壓力和考場速度減慢，其實這些問題都在代詞指代上或許可以找到出路。

• 例子

學(xué)生版

Adverts are almost everywhere (e.g. on TV, on buses, on mobile phones and even in toilets), largely dominating domestic consumption. Nonetheless, how further it can genuinely help those advertised products remains a contentious matter. While sales can be considerably promoted, I vehemently believe adverts are also effective in raising the quality.

修改版

Adverts are almost everywhere (e.g. on TV, on buses, on mobile phones and even in toilets), largely dominating domestic consumption. Nonetheless, how further they can genuinely help these advertised products remains a contentious matter. While sales can be considerably promoted, I vehemently believe they are also effective in raising the quality.

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