When all things are considered ， young adults of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents， in my opinion.
這句話當(dāng)中的“ when all things are considered ”和“ in my opinion “都顯得多余。完全可以去掉。改為：
Young adults of today live more satisfying lives than their parents.
2. 有些空洞和繁瑣的表達(dá)方式可以進(jìn)行替換，例如：
Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents， they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time.
“ due to the fact that ”就是一個(gè)很典型的繁瑣的表達(dá)方式的例子，可以替換，簡化為下面的表達(dá)方式：
Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents， they did not have the options that young people have now.
The situation that resulted in my grandfather's not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm.
從意思上來分析，上面這句話需要表達(dá)的重要的概念是“ grandfather's not being able to study ”，而在表達(dá)這個(gè)概念時(shí)，原句用的主語是 situation ，謂語動詞是 was ，不能強(qiáng)調(diào)需要表達(dá)的重點(diǎn)概念，可以改為下面這句話：
My grandfather couldn't study engineering because his father needed help on the farm.
2. 避免頻繁使用“ there be ”結(jié)構(gòu)，例如下面的句子：
There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather.
可以改為：
My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day.
更簡潔的句式為：
My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily.
3. 把從句改為短語或單詞。例如：
Dairy cows were raised on the farm， which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote.
簡介的表達(dá)方式為：
The dairy farm was located in a remote area， 100 kilometers to the nearest university.
In the fall， not only did the cows have to be milked， but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather's family.
本句不夠簡潔的原因是本句的重心應(yīng)該是“忙碌的家庭 -my grandfather's family ”，而使用了被動語態(tài)后，仿佛重心變成了 cows 和 hay 。下面的表達(dá)方式是主動語態(tài)，相對來說更簡潔一些：
In the fall， my grandfather's family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay.
5. 用更為精確的一個(gè)動詞來代替動詞短語，例如下面這句話：
My grandfather didn't have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends.
Stand around doing nothing 其實(shí)可以用一個(gè)動詞來表達(dá)，即 loiter ：
My grandfather didn't have time to loiter with his school friends.
6. 有時(shí)兩句話的信息經(jīng)過組合完全可以用一句話來簡練地表達(dá)，例如：
Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too small to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree.
兩句話的信息可以合并為下面這句更為簡潔的句子：
Profits from the farm were sometimes too small to meet operational expenses， let alone pay for a university degree.
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